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Tightly packed (September 2020)

In her “Letter from Uganda”, published in The Guardian on 15 October 2006 and referred to already in my blog post of June, Monica Ali writes about Ugandan refugee camps. One of these camps, Amida, she experiences first hand: “As I slide through the mud, between the tightly packed huts, following Geoffrey, Oxfam’s public-health facilitator, to his home, I almost laugh at the naivety with which I viewed those laminated cards.”

The translator renders this sentence into German: “Als ich durch die vollgestopften Hütten durch den Matsch schlittere und Geoffrey, dem Gesundheitsbeauftragten von Oxfam, zu seinem Heim folge, muss ich über die Naivität, mit der ich diese beschichteten Karten betrachtet hatte, fast lachen.” This translation should be improved in two places. Can you see where?

Stylistically inappropriate is the noun “Heim” as a translation for “home”. This can be a suitable rendering in a different context; however, in the context of a refugee camp, it certainly isn’t. The Duden defines “Heim” as “jemandes Wohnung, Zuhause (unter dem Aspekt von Geborgenheit, angenehmer Häuslichkeit)”, that is, somebody’s flat or home considered under the aspect of safety and homeliness. Thus, “to decorate one’s home” might well be translated into German as “das Heim schmücken”. However, you should not imagine the accommodation of the public-health facilitator of Oxfam in a Ugandan refugee camp to be nice and cosy. Therefore, the noun “Hütte” (“hut”) is a better translation, here.

Compared to this stylistic error, the translation error at the beginning of the sentence is more serious because it changes the meaning. What, do you think, are “vollgestopfte Hütten”? Well, to be sure, there is the expression of a “tightly packed suitcase”, which would be rendered as “vollgestopfter Koffer”. But what would the huts be tightly packed with? People? That would be a rather disrespectful way of putting it. No, the meaning is different: the plural form “tightly packed huts” refers to the limited space that is left between the huts.

By way of conclusion, the following translation would be acceptable: Als ich zwischen den dicht an dicht stehenden Hütten durch den Matsch schlittere und Geoffrey, dem Gesundheitsbeauftragten von Oxfam, zu seiner Hütte folge, muss ich über die Naivität, mit der ich diese beschichteten Karten betrachtet hatte, fast lachen.